tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3956602142824296449.post6740373387345276975..comments2024-03-22T18:13:55.958+00:00Comments on Deanna Crisbacher : Adaptation A: Sound Design Progress #2Deannahttp://www.blogger.com/profile/10573754094233201638noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3956602142824296449.post-6212327576285480612017-02-09T17:24:54.892+00:002017-02-09T17:24:54.892+00:00Thanks for the feedback, I went back and changed s...Thanks for the feedback, I went back and changed some of the words. I realised that I forgot to swap 'metal rod' for 'lightning rod' and I changed around a few other words too. Deannahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10573754094233201638noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3956602142824296449.post-70267496607808698822017-02-09T16:41:11.707+00:002017-02-09T16:41:11.707+00:00just dropping by to say I think you can lose the &...just dropping by to say I think you can lose the 'because' on the 'because they are the most conductive' - it's obvious that's what you mean and 'They are the most conductive' is pithier - I would take a look at your text and see if you've got other places where you've got a little word in there you don't really need :) Looking forward to seeing this completed - I suspect you're having fun :)tutorphilhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11842833126210822641noreply@blogger.com